Love’s Labour Lost

Hello! I’m very apprehensive about the poem I’m posting today. I tried something different which isn’t really my style but I did want to write it once. So, please be kind but, of course, constructive criticism is always welcome! What intrigues me is that the verse below is quite open to interpretation and it would really mean a lot if you could tell me what you made of it. I’ll love to hear the different versions and how they relate to what I intended while writing it.

Here goes nothing –

Stone cold.

Cold hearted.

Heart, set on fire.

Fiery desire.

Desirous love.

Love’s labour.

Laborious sin.

Sinner’s plea.

“Not guilty”.

Guilty gavel.

Gavel pounds.

Slab of stone.

Stone cold.

Cold hearted.

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62 thoughts on “Love’s Labour Lost

    1. Could be ๐Ÿค”. Yes, I think that would fit but it explains only half the poem. Do you think you could expand on this thought of yours and include the entire story? I’d love to hear more!

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  1. Interesting construction!
    I could imagine a tragic story unfurling from those string of words. A cold-hearted person evoking a raving emotion of unbridled passion in a potential lover; falling in for lust rather than love. Unwilling to bear its burden, tries to turn the table around by blaming the victim. The indifference leads to his/her ultimate demise, a routine case of love gone bad.

    I also read the comments sections and found that someone has already traversed along similar lines. Burdened with a biased perspective Iโ€™m unable to offer a different aspect, although the clever usage of words demands it. Well done.

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    1. Wow! That’s some imagery! I think this would be the most appropriate alternative construction of the words herein. Yes, people have traversed along similar lines but there’s been sufficient variation to make this an original thought. Thank you so much for sharing it and thank you for your kind comment. ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. The acute usage of words make it open to interpretation. But the influence of countless suspense thrillers makes it hard to avoid the underlying theme. I would just blame it on Sheldon I guess.

        You should post more stuff like this. An interesting activity.

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        1. Hahaha true! All those whodunnits sure take their toll on our psyche. However, this one was tailored on a dark theme itself.
          I’ll try. This was an experiment. Wasn’t sure if people would be willing to participate. I think I can give it another go now. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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          1. Sure. Count me in.

            Like someone said, ‘A story is written three times: once in author’s mind; again when he puts it on paper; and finally, when the reader reads it’. I think the same goes for poetry as well. We all have a certain way of connecting with a particular emotion. It is interesting to see how different people of varying taste react to the same piece of literature.

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            1. I had half a mind to write today that this post was a social experiment. Now I know how each one of you thinks! Evil laughter
              But due to unexpected amount of replies, I dropped the idea. More activities coming up soon! ๐Ÿ˜Š

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              1. The number of comments on your previous posts is what made me share my perspective on this one. Like I said earlier; a place to connect, and evolve.

                And doesn’t it work the other way around as well? We getting to know a different aspect of you through successive posts. But I don’t think my evil laughter could beat yours. So I will just stick with a wicked smile. ๐Ÿ™‚

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                1. Those comments were people’s appreciation of criticism of the poems. Here, their active participation was needed. I wasn’t sure if they’d have the time to interpret and share. They surprised me! And I am so happy because of it. ๐Ÿ˜Š
                  Hahaha, yes, it works both ways. But I’d only be an individual, the comments here are a reasonable enough sample size to be termed an experiment ๐Ÿ˜‰. Hence, my conclusions would hold more validity. ๐Ÿ˜‹
                  Lol, pretty sure your evil laughter could surpass mine!

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                  1. Ah, the name gave it away!
                    I think people would be more than happy to participate in these ‘social experiments’ as it is a better way for them to connect to you and vice versa. That is my opinion anyway. And the number of comments on this post should validate it.
                    Looking for more adventures ahead.

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      1. I feel like it’s talking about the very cruel human being who still pleads of not guilty of anything that he did wrong. As the result he is buried naked under the stone , and still it’s winter punishing him.

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        1. I’ve already explained that in the comments. ๐Ÿ™‚ Different pieces of it as replies to different opinions. Please take a look and let me know what you think.

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  2. I thought it was about unrequited love – a heart hard as stone and a heart set on fire. But its minimalism leaves it open to interpretation. I also liked how you repeated words from each line. Is “Here goes nothing – ” part of the poem? I think I might like to see it repeated in the end, even though I really like how you finished it.

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    1. Wow! That makes a lot of sense. It could very well be a story of unrequited love.
      Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚. Haha, sorry, but that isn’t part of the poem. I said that because of my apprehension about sharing this one and then decided to throw caution to the wind, hence, “here goes nothing”. If it were a part of the poem, I’d have definitely used it to end the poem too. Although, in all honesty, then I, myself, wouldn’t have been able to have one coherent interpretation of it ๐Ÿ˜…. Thank you again, I’m very glad you liked it.

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    1. Wow, that seems to be spot on! I was going to name this poem ‘Vicious Cycle’ at first so your interpretation is very suited. No, no, don’t be embarrassed at all. Like I said, I purposely wrote this in a way that a lot of meanings could be drawn. Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Jina! It’s always a pleasure to have you visit my blog. ๐Ÿ’•

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        1. Never be afraid of commenting. Atleast on here. Your views would always be welcome, even if I haven’t asked for them specifically in the post. Having said that, never be afraid of speaking out. Period.
          I did want to understand what people took from the poem and it makes me immensely happy that you shared. ๐Ÿ™‚
          Hahaha I didn’t intend to make it tricky. ๐Ÿ™ˆ

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    2. Wow, that seems to be spot on! I was going to name this poem ‘Vicious Cycle’ at first so your interpretation is very suited. No, no, don’t be embarrassed at all. Like I said, I purposely wrote this in a way that a lot of meanings could be drawn. Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Jina! It’s always a pleasure to have you visit my blog. ๐Ÿ’•

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  3. To me it is an accurate description of a feminist wymyn who is stone cold hearted until she has a man in her sights she wishes to destroy. Then she gets all fired up and does a victory dance when she has attained her goal only to fall stone cold hearted silent until another one comes along.

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    1. Makes sense. However, I think this fails to explain the judgment part of the poem. Do you want to expand on your interpretation to include that? I’d be very happy to see your further take on this. (PS- a feminist woman is quite different from a predator. ๐Ÿ˜…)

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      1. Unfortunately all feminist wymyn are indeed predators who harshly judge the male gender then condemn all men both innocent and guilty alike and seek to destroy them by any means necessary. The current sexual harassment Witch hunt is the beginning of the fourth wave of feminism that will end as badly for men as antisemitism did for the Jews in nazi germany. As their goal is to reduce the male population by ten percent of its population. Further more believing in equality under the law and regarding oppotunity for both men and women does not make either a man or woman a feminist but a humanitarian.

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        1. Sorry, but you don’t really know what feminism means then. I’d suggest you to read up on it. You’re getting your concepts mixed up. And really, how can a call for treating all humans equally be equated to genocide? They’re fundamentally opposite. Really, please, read on it. I implore you. Don’t mindlessly believe what’s portrayed by people who are equally ignorant.

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          1. It never fails to amaze me just how clueless a highly educated female like yourself can be in regards to feminism. It just so happens that long before Hitler came to power pseudo scientists published their research regarding the Jews casting them in a vile light the same way feminists have been doing to the male gender in our day. Creating a climate that allowed the German people to look the other way when he began rounding up the Jews to be exterminated.

            I’m 58 yrs old I have lived through the second and third waves of feminism and studied the first wave. Over 20 yrs ago I began looking into the issues brought up by the feminists and quickly discovered that they lack empathy for those who refuse to accept their views and dare to challenge them. That feminists have absolute no moral integrity what so ever and are as intellectually dishonest as a preacher who preaches morality from the pulpit while deliberately lying to his congregation. As two faced as a lawyer who speaks out of one side of his mouth in court on Monday and out of the other side of his mouth on Friday for a different client regarding the exact same type of issue.

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            1. Well, then you might hate me even more. Because this highly educated female also happens to be a lawyer. Sorry to say, you’re wrong on both counts. Feminism as well as the work of a lawyer. Also, bad mouthing a concept that calls for equality, fair treatment for all and the people who are trying to spread awareness of the same, on the basis of the actions of some misguided people, thereby staunchly opposing what is, in essence, a recognition of the most basic of human rights, is quite akin to what Hitler did. I implore you to go through my blog, tell me if you can find a single instance of lack of empathy on my part, or presence of deception, subterfuge, dishonesty, etc. I’m a feminist, believing in equality and fair treatment for all irrespective of race, gender, caste or creed, and I’m opening myself up to you for scrutiny. I hope, just like you blame feminists for not being kind towards people who do not share the same views as them, you would atleast, yourself, be open to seeing my views, what they stand for and thinking on them with an open mind.

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              1. First off I do not hate you or any other woman for that matter…

                I’ve known that you were a lawyer ever since I started following your blog and you are not a feminist. Just one of thousands if not millions of females who like eve has been deceived into taking a bite of the forbidden fruit; into supporting a movement that uses the false claim of seeking equality as bait but in reality is seeking superiority over the male gender. I suggest that you further educate yourself by reading The myth of Male Power written by Warren Farrell who was a already a first wave feminist until the radicals overtook the movement and began promoting misandry – hatred of men. As well as acquaint yourself with the anti Jew movement in Germany long before Hitler came to power. And btw feminists and lawyers aren’t the only ones trained in intellectual dishonesty as virtually all professions Doctors, medicine, psychology, politicians, politics, economics, religion etc. etc.
                have a thread of intellectual dishonesty running through them as well. That is why I read and think for myself.

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              2. Varnika i always hold women, feminists and their white knights to same exact standard to which I as a man am held to and expected to abide by.

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              1. I would suggest them that you open your eyes and stop lying to
                Yourself before you become one of their victims.

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                  1. One of my coworkers who i have known for 20 yrs had to learn the hard way that I was right. After his wife became an alcoholic he had to have her removed from their home when she physically assaulted him while drunk. During their divorce she was arrested, charged with DUI and her car was impounded which she could not afford to retrieve. So along with a couple of law enforcement officers she showed up on his doorstep and forced him to hand over his keys to his truck. Needless to say he no longer disparages me regarding these issues.

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                    1. That is not what feminism is. That is something else. Feminism is about having equal rights in everyday lives. Feminism is about women having their own choices in how they want to live, rather than be dictated by someone else. The story you’ve shared isn’t what feminism is about.

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                    2. Wrong again the feminist campaigned pretty hard to ensure that women are favored – especially the guilty and unworthy ones – over men by law enforcement and the family court system. Your inability to distimguish reality from fantssy reminds me of the film title “Eyes Wide Shut”.

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  4. brave foray! i had to read a few times, as i was first caught up in the joinery between the lines–i’m a very visual person, and so seeing the words and their orientation came before the meaning of the poem. well written and concise; the story of the guilty lover with a cold heart who then literally becomes a cold heart on a slab: well done!

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  5. I thought about this in two ways: 1) someone found guilty of a wrong doing and sentenced to death; and, 2) an unwanted pregnancy, perhaps. Word choice leads me to think the first , even if it metaphorical for something like a lost love. I like how you take a word from each line to reuse it in the next. Had this been my poem, i would have switched the last two lines, ending with the line you started with, adding emphasis with close by return ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Wow! Firstly, thank you for commenting. Yes, I did mean it in a way where a cold hearted person ignited a fire in someone’s heart by feigning his affections, he’s found guilty of it and the punishment, indeed, is death. As the body now lies on a slab of stone, cold within and without. I wrote it originally in the way you suggested, by switching the lines but then I edited it because I thought the two lines together formed one whole and conveyed the idea better. I hope it works.
      Your second interpretation wasn’t something I’d expected but now I can see how very aptly it applies to the lines! Kudos to your imagination! Thank you for reading. Love ๐Ÿ’•

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      1. You are welcome. I agree with how you approached lining up the lines. I thought about it again after I have left the comment ๐Ÿ™‚ I thought about the second connection because some years ago I read a local book called Love’s Labour Lost – the story of Midwifery. So, I instantly thought baby ๐Ÿ™‚ Again, you are most welcome ๐Ÿ™‚

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        1. ๐Ÿ™‚ The only Love’s Labour Lost I’ve read before was Shakespeare’s. But the one on midwives seems interesting. The title and the topic is bound to make for some informative reading. I’ll try to get my hands on a copy. Much love ๐Ÿ’•.

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